The only residents remaining in the small town of Miners Hill are spirits. Even they won’t be around much longer.
I’m more of a transient, so I don’t count.
There really isn’t any word for what I’m doing. You might go with “Exorcist” as a rough approximation, I suppose, except I’m not a priest. I’m cleansing the town of spirits one at a time, proceeding uphill.
Atop the hill is a government building, see the one that looks like a hotel but isn’t? That was once the State Asylum.
Before the mine and the radon gas release and So. Many. Dead.
I learned how to make lenses. I stumbled on a combination of polarized coatings that could render the essences of the recently dead visible. Whatever your brand of religion calls them. Then I developed my cleansing lamp using essentially the same effect.
Don’t worry, Mother. I’m on the way.
150 words. Inspired by this week’s Monday’s Finish the Story prompt:
20 thoughts on “The Fool on the Hill”
I wonder if his goggles or lamp actually do anything? Or is he just like Mom?
I’d like to believe that his googles/lamp actually do as he says they will do because I think if they do, that would be pretty darn cool. The story was awesome!
The worst part about writing micros, when you get a “idea’s too big, need moar wordz plz” stories.
Yes, I know I misspelled goggles. I spelt it as googles. In my Flash Fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers, the word limit is 100-150 + or – 25 words. So there is a gift of a few more words should a person need them for their story.
Interesting inventions….Well done story!
meh. I wanted to give him much better (and more variety of) gadgets. Strangled by word count. Steampunk-ghosthunter…
Very interesting approach. But fool because he’s mad and thinks the lenses work or that need searching for mom? Great read
Could be crazy-from-grief, or maybe mom’s ghost really needs releasing. Find out when he gets up there.
Nicely written, interesting story.
Thanks, it left me with … unexplored ideas.
Maybe maddening? :heh:
Great story, Dave. 🙂 Your question after it adds an entirely different dimension to the piece. Well done.
Might work as a short story, a couple thousand words maybe. Definitely room for expansion. (Probably not a novel, given only one character…?)
Nice last line, adds a personal touch to his endeavours. Very inventive!
Oh, it’s definitely personal for him. Just couldn’t decide if he’s nuts or sane…guess I’m leaning toward “sane but twitchy”.
Nicely told story Dave! I loved the last line! Thanks again for contributing to the MFtS challenge! See you next time and be well. ^…^
Yah sure, you betcha.
I’m wondering if he’s actually made what he thinks or is someone who was in the asylum and survived to get loose. Interesting story. It makes me wonder. Well done, Dave. 🙂 —- Suzanne